You saw a brochure for a one-week walking tour in the mountains. You're very interested in taking part, but you're not very fit and are worried you wouldn't be able to keep up. Write to the tour operator. In your letter: • Explain why you're interested in the tour. • Ask for information about dates and prices. • Express your concerns about your fitness level

Dear Sir, I am writing to you to inquire about the upcoming trip which is for one week. I have read about the tour in the mountains in a daily newspaper and want to join it. Camping and travelling in hilly areas are one of my biggest dreams,
Thus
, It brings my attention to
this
news.
Moreover
, I want some time off work from my office schedule. So,
This
factor
also
enables me to show my interest in it so that I can feel relaxed and enjoy the nature there.
Furthermore
, I am a nature person who loves to spend time with the innocent creature present on the globe which arouses my interest to travel to
this
place.
However
, I am a little bit concerned about my health. As I have an injury on my right leg which can cause trouble for me during the journey. So, I want to ask if there is any medical facility available in case of any mishappening or ill-health.
Also
, I would like to know the exact dates and timings of
this
plan, so that I can manage my schedule according to
this
. I
also
request you to could you please send me the detailed instructions as well as the charge per person which is demanded by the operator for the whole trip. I am looking forward to hearing from your side. Thanking You. Yours Faithfully, Kuljeet Kaur.
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