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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Parents are the best teachers. Use specific reasons and examples to support you

#parents #teachers #support
All of my support is on that statement. Once Mahatma Gandhi
said
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 “ Every home is a university and the
parents
 are the teachers “. That quote is quite purposeful to us and the meaning of it is so simple but so deep inside and its potential is overwhelming for the whole universe because it is composed of human beings
that
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means
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 if there are no
parents
then
 there will be no children. I have two specific reasons concerning it.
Firstly
, when I was little, I used to play with kids near my house.
Everytime
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 I played, my
parents
 didn’t allow me to play for as long as I wanted to. They always called me up and said that now it was time to study, eat, take a nap and something like that. To be more accurate, I was at a boundary of discipline all the time in every aspect of my childhood
life
. I followed every single word my
parents
 said.When I grow up, I would love to be a punctual
person
 everybody respects. Now, I know the value of time, the most precious treasure throughout our
life
 and
also
 know the wealth of discipline. It’s so easy for me to handle everything by myself in every corner of my world.
This
 is one of the things I learned from my
parents
.
Secondly
, the leader of my
life
 is my mental behaviour. I wanna tell you something about it. My
parents
 always treated me in peace and guided me the right way I can clearly see even if I made mistakes which they were told a thousand times not to do on account
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they didn’t want to influence dreadful manners upon me.
With
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such
 a beautiful way, I started my
first
 step
to
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 the world. They taught me that kindness is not a weakness but a kind of power. A
person
 without kindness is powerless. Kindness means noticing someone else's needs. It means seeing the value in every
person
 we meet. My
parents
 showed me how to be an appealing
person
 with gentleness, warmth, compassion and love. Once Mahatma
Gahni
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Gandhi
Ghani
said
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 “ In a gentle way, you can shake the world”. The other treasure of my
life
 is trust from me
to
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others and vice versa. Whether we are conscious of it or not, it’s the main leader of communication with people. I have always been making a special effort into it. The trust I am willing to give and take from everybody around me. The heritage words from my
parents
 regarding it, trust is like our blood which is flowing through every part of our bodies without missing any areas. They taught me it very well. Let me finish the famous
quotes
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 of Mahatma Gandhi “ There is no school equal to a decent home and no teacher equal to
a virtuous
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a virtuous parent
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parents
” .
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