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You ordered equipment online. However, when you received it, it was damaged. Send a letter to the manager of the company. In your letter, you should tell : giving the details about the equipment explain the damage suggest what you want the manager to do.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I'm writing
this
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 letter to inform you about damage product delivered by your
company
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.
Last
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 week, I ordered a Kitchen Chimney from your
company
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's online website. When I unboxed it and put
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it into
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into
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to
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 work , it created
loud
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a loud
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 noise. As I
am
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did
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 not
expected
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expect
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this
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 type of problem from your
company
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's product. So
that
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apply
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an inspection
has been
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was
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 done by
registered
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a registered
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 electrician at my house and he informed
that
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me that
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 the silencer of
chimney
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the chimney
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 was not working properly. I immediately called to the customer service and registered my complaint. They told me that
this
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 problem would
solve
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be solved
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 within one week and after
that
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that,
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 I waited for the solution.
Apart from
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this
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, I called repeatedly them and requested to complete my complaint as fast as possible.
Unfortunetly
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Unfortunately
, I did not get any service from your
company
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. At one point, I got very frustrated and wrote
letter
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a letter
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 to you. As
i
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I
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 mentioned
you
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to you
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 already
that
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apply
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I bought
recently
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it recently
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 and I have
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a warrenty
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warrenty
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warranty
of
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for
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 that equipment.
Therefore
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, I
requested
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request
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to
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that
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 you please replace my chimney , or else start the process of refund, I would like to give you
return
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a return
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my
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of my
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 product as soon as possible. I am looking forward to your
immidiate
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immediate
 action in
this
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regards
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.
Your
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Yours
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 faithfully Rinkesh Patel

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coherence cohesion
Incorporate more transitional phrases for smoother flow.
coherence cohesion
Ensure consistency with spelling and punctuation.
task achievement
The letter provides all necessary details about the equipment and the incident.
task achievement
Polite tone and clear expression of concerns and requests.
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