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The internet has made knowledge immediately available to people through computers and smartphones all around the world. Much of this knowledge is also free. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

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Currently, the
internet
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 is the most powerful communication of
humanity
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 and everyone is able to connect
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 other whenever they want. In my opinion, I've always thought that
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technology
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 has both benefits and drawbacks
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 the same
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.
To begin
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 with, the
internet
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 is the communication way which supports
people
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 to send and receive data as far as they want and makes
people
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 always connected.
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, the advancement of
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 lead us to adapt
internet
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signal
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 to use in
computer
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computers
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 and especially
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smartphones
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 either for entertainment or work. Those
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 make
people
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 can live easier without any doubt, but, we are not able to refuse that there is some trouble came from using the
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, which is outlined in the
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 paragraph.
Firstly
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, the
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 drawback is that twenty-four hours available. The majority are seduced to join the world of data and entertainment. It affects
people
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's routine life to be not constant and lack of discipline,
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,
people
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 will not sleep at the appropriate
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 but desired
time
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, which unfortunately reduces human living efficiency.
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, those technologies cause
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 will be connected all the
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. As we can see when individuals use their
smartphone
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smartphones
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. Talking with someone located far away is an easy task to do nowadays because of a helping from
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. Fortunately, some countries announced serious measures about using mobile
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 with hoping to separate
humanity
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 from the world of
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internet
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. To conclude, all technologies, not only the
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 and smartphone, in the meantime, can support and destroy
humanity
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.
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, the importance is developing and utilizing it carefully and wisely, it surely results in the most beneficial thing for us.
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, I strongly believe that
humanity
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 can overcome the drawback of
technology
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 and gain the most effective result.
However
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, we need to remember that every coin has always two sides, the same thing can become our weapon or toxic depending on our use.
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