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some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion ?

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Art
 is considered one of the most important things in the world, there are many types of
art
such
 as
music
. some
people
 think that
music
 is a good method of bringing the community of the various countries, ages and cultures to each other. In
this
 ,
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essay I will introduce my opinion about
this
 issue. In most ,cases I agree that
music
 is considered a better
way
 to aggregate
people
 because all
people
 like to listen to whom they loved singers and are ready to go anywhere to listen to them. when I was abroad in my
country
 , I met with foreign folks and I knew that they went to another
country
 to attend concert
music
 for famous singers and through the accommodation period in that
country
 they explored the culture, So I think from
this
 side the
music
 is so significant
way
.
On the other hand
, I disagree because not just
music
 that introduces the culture, there are many types of
art
 that are so important like making films.
although
 the film of any
country
 can define the historical places and great culture through an awesome method. many films have attracted
people
 to many places to visit ,
therefore
,
music
 is not the only
way
 to bring humans.
finally
, I think that
music
 so an important
way
 to define and aggregate the various cultures whereas there are many other methods it can be so better and more effective.So I think
art
 in all types is so crucial in that issue and it should be diversity of method to become more attractive.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal language
  • evoke
  • connect
  • diverse audiences
  • cultural exchange
  • generational gaps
  • shared experiences
  • unifying force
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