Computers are becoming an essential part of school lessons. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages and give your own.

Many schools in the world , in
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, have been meeting interactive educational
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. It might be more merits than demerits. In
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First
of
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modernity provide technological events that we can use
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many areas. Particularly, when we think about the science,
such
natural sciences as biology, physic or
first
learning steps for between 4-7 ages , probably it can be better because of effects of the visual memory. Visually has come to the embodying , bring with more understanding knowledge. So we can say , in every division in life we are using
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computers.
Further
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many new occupational
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is deriving like software engineering or programming. I believe the reason for , ta
computer
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becomes widespread and artificial intelligence as well.
Nonetheless
, including that`s jobs and lots of them , has a good well-paid.
On the other hand
, in the information age no except for don`t know how to use a computer. In some way , computers are everywhere.
However
, it can be said as a negative impact, humanity is going to fly to splinter. We are getting used to practical, easy life not as much as we used to. Especially, using the computers in educational part , makes us lazy to reach
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information. There is no value in
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if one can`t make an effort . That`s why it can be
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disadvantage for human beings. To sum up, unfortunately, anybody can not run out of technology.
Although
, we have to learn to live with it. If it can`t go far away , we have to learn to switch
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positives. It seems . only optionality for us.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Edutainment
  • Multimedia resources
  • E-learning platforms
  • Digital literacy
  • Cyberbullying
  • Ergonomic hazards
  • Cognitive overload
  • Technological proficiency
  • Blended learning environments
  • Instructional technology
  • Adaptive software
  • Screen time management
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