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Many young people are leaving their homes in rural areas to study or work in the cities. What are the reasons? Do the advantages of this development outweigh its disadvantages?

#people #homes #areas #study #work #cities #development
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In many countries, educational
systems
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 make
students
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 who are 15 years old focus on just certain
subjects
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, but other
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 believe that
students
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 should study a wide range of
subjects
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 until they leave school. The benefits of a certain only number of
subjects
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 can limit
students
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 at the age of 15 but if they focus on a lot of
subjects
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, they can be more successful and extend world view. I think a wide range of
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 outweighs certain
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. Both of these viewpoints will be outlined in detail before concluding. 88
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 with, the damage caused by only certain
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 varies considerably depending on both the
education
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 of fixed
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 and limited information.
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,
students
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' brains can not improve hard at an early age because of
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.
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, my cousin who has lived in Nigeria for 10 years knows many
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 less than American
students
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. One of the biggest reasons for that situation is the quality of
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 programs in Nigeria. Indeed, these issues may be solved by governments or genius citizens.81
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, recent research suggests that focusing on certain objects can be detrimental for
students
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 who are 15 years old. so if we want to improve their
education
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 level, we should give a wide range of
subjects
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 until they leave school.
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 they should identify the areas they are good at and choose them.55-224 To sum up, the youth will continue to be drawn towards more developed areas in search of better
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, jobs and lifestyle.
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,
this
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 phenomenon will, eventually, bring prosperity to all.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Migration
  • Urbanization
  • Educational institutions
  • Job prospects
  • Wages
  • Economic growth
  • Cultural exchange
  • Overpopulation
  • Cost of living
  • Rural depopulation
  • Social isolation
  • Traditional values
  • Personal growth
  • Recreational activities
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