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The rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern lifestyle. What are the advantages of this trend? Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Today, the consumption of fast
food
 and prepared dishes has become a widespread trenlthod,
although
this
 movement is a kind of controversial issue among experts. It is obvious that there is a wide range of advantages and disadvantages related to
this
 issue. In my perspective, I believe that the cons outweigh the pros . On the one hand, it appears that consumption of fast
food
 can be considered as a remedy for reducing waste of
time
, By which I mean by eating convenient
food
 can help lots of people to be on
time
 and they can
also
 avoid preparing
time
-consuming recipes.
Furthermore
, another advantage is the ease with some of these to prepare,
for example
, preparing noodles or soups does not require advanced cooking skills, ones can conveniently make them in three minutes by putting them in boiling water.
On the other hand
,
this
 trend can be known as an obstacle to spending
time
 with family members that it makes youngsters spend far less
time
 with their extended family,
thus
 it clearly leads to eroding family relationships and
also
 it can easily break the bond between parents and their children.
Moreover
, we must be aware of the high level of dangers of
this
 growing trend,
for instance
, if individuals consume regularly these kinds of foods
such
 as junky
food
, they would definitely suffer from diseases like heart problems, diabetes and high blood pressure. In conclusion, it is true that there are significant merits related to
this
 trend,
however
, it appears to me that these advantages are outweighed by drawbacks,
in addition
, it is more advisable that people are being worried about their relationships and health than the pace of their work.
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