many manufactured food and drink products contain high level of sugar,which causes many health problems. sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar.

Nowadays, the issue of manufactured food which has
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. Should government build
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on
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product
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products
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that cause
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money? Or should not?
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cause more expensive money on
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, I stand on the same page
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the policy. If the regulation
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, people would still buy
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product
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. Due to compare to
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product
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, it is more tasty and convenient.
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the inside, so you can taste
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and chewy at the same time. Individuals just could not change their habits.
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belive
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that government should release the policy. The more
sugar
people eat, the more they would have diseases.
Such
as higher blood pleasure or diabetes,
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is a lifelong
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problem.
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long time if the manufactured
product
prise
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higher
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than nature. Individuals would consider
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their habits
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because they can save money. In
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products problem still impact our
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prise
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of
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would have more
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sugar consumption
  • health problems
  • manufactured food and drink products
  • encourage
  • expensive
  • reduce
  • effectively
  • discourage
  • tight budget
  • purchasing
  • disproportionately
  • lower-income individuals
  • healthier food choices
  • demand
  • regardless
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