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In many countries, many people do not do exercise or play any sport. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society?

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A lot of
people
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 do not have
habit
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a habit
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 of exercising or taking up a sport to keep fit. There are several causes why
people
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 do not want to do it, and if they continue to be like that, there are several effects
for
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this
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 problem. There are many reasons why
people
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 do not want to exercise.
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,
people
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too
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 busy so they do not have enough time to keep fit. According to the development of society, the work is getting heavier. A lot of
people
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 feel exhausted after a day of work while exercise consumes a lot of energy.
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, they would choose to relax
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 as watching
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a movie
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movie
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, hanging out with friends, sleeping all day, and so on.
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, most
people
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 are lazy when they have to choose a sport. Sports require perseverance as well as
hobby
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a hobby
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. When starting to play sports,
people
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 need to maintain it
regurlarly
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regularly
 to get the desired result.
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, they do not have enough
patient
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 to maintain a workout plan. If
people
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 continue their lazy habits, they may get in trouble in future.
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, their health declines and the risk of diseases
such
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 as obesity, heart disease, and so on, is higher.
This
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 shortens human life and
also
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make
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people
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 delay in work.
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, society would slow down because of
people
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’s laziness.
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,
people
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 who do not exercise would feel more stress than those who do. The laziness makes
body
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the body
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do
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not
secretes
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 enough hormones to regulate stress.
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, their mental health is
impared
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impaired
 and they are prone to other
illness
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. In conclusion,
the
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apply
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laziness is caused by many reasons and negative effects on
social
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the social
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 life of
human
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humans
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 when they do not want to keep fit.

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  • Conclusion

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