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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advantages of diverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages.

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Nowadays, technology plays a crucial role in our lives
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this
 idea is the reason why cars will become autonomous wherein only the passengers will be riding in the next few decades.in
this
 essay, I will be discussing both
merits
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 and demerits of using autonomous transportation.From my point of view, the future of navigation is needed by
this
 technology. On the one hand, there are obviously many advantages that
this
 phenomenon brings.Obviously, people who are sleepy and
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 will be able to travel by themselves.
Moreover
, cars, buses and trucks will become more spacious. they can accommodate more riders as compared to the current situation.
For example
, a public bus in Iran can currently
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 approximately 40 people, without counting the driver and helper.
Although
, if the driver and helper are removed, additional spaces will be provided for use.
As a result
, it will promote less traffic congestion because fewer buses are needed on the road for navigation.
On the other hand
,
this
 type of phenomenon will have drawbacks which is one of the big disadvantages is losing some qualifications.Clearly, the hardworking drivers will be displaced.these professions, in a way, will be useless because the machines will replace them.
In addition
, artificial intelligence still does not have the capacity to function and think
such
 as a human being.
Consequently
, they can put the lives of passengers at risk. In summary,
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self-driven cars will be expanded in the near future where only passengers are riders.they can benefit not only commuters but
also
 the environment in order
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 the climate will be cleaner.I strongly believe that these advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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task response
Address the prompt more directly by discussing the advantages and disadvantages in more detail. Provide a clearer stance on whether the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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