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Many cities are now turning parks and farmland into new housing developments. Is this a positive or negative development?

#cities #parks #farmland #developments #development
Dear Sam, Hope you are doing great? How was your trip to London
last
 week? I heard it was raining cats and dogs over there during the week of your vacation. I'm writing
this
 to inform you about an accident that took place at your apartment while you were away. Actually, the place is all good except the leakage in the roof of your living area, which is the main reason for the accident. I was exercising that morning, while it was raining
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 when suddenly I slipped because of the leaked water on the floor. Unfortunately, I tried taking support of the
TV
 while falling down and brought the
TV
 down along with me, which lead to the damage. It
happend
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happened
happens
happen
 on a
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last
 week
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 when there was a storm in our area.
Moreover
, the storm caused the leakage from the roof, eventually causing the disaster. In order to resolve the issue, I've asked the
TV
 maintenance guy to fix the display and make the
TV
 work as originally. He'll visit the place tomorrow evening. Rest assured, I've
also
 taken care of the payment. I'm hopeful that the issue will be resolved soon and you will soon be able to see your
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 show. Sorry once again! Don't hesitate to call me if you need any help. Best, Rohit
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