Some people think that international news is more important than local news. Others argue that local news is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

These
day
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people place a premium on
news
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the news
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. While some people argue that world
news
is important, other think that local
news
has more
impacts
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. In my
view
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our country
news
has had more effects on our life. To advance a convincing theory I could deal with, the compelling reason
of
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why each
country
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news
is more important. The
first
thing I should mention is
,
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its effects on our lives.
For instance
, if a new rule is put, everything will change. So as to obey that rule you must be aware of every single report
that is
said in newspapers and etcetera. On top of that, on the grounds that we know what is going to
happened
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in our country, it will help us to plan for
future
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the future
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and have
better
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vision of the place we live in. another feature which I should mention most of the word topics is not related to us. By knowing them we just have wasted our time and make our mind tired
as a result
we have less energy for doing our work.
Although
knowing world information are not that important, sometimes, some
news
will have a
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knock-on-effect
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on our
life-style
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lifestyle
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or even
they
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apply
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have dire consequences. The ones that are related
is
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very important for us. So we must follow
those selected
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news
. To conclude, even that world
news
that
are
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related to us, will be said in our local
news
so there is no need to follow them. Don’t lose your time following nonessential topics.
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