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Some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

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The relative importance of
parents
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 and teachers is a frequent topic of discussion when people try to understand how to educate
children
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 to be good members of
society
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. In my opinion, both are critical, and we need to dig deeper into their roles to understand
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. On the one hand,
parents
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 are best placed to teach their
children
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 how to be good members of any
society
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.
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 with,
parents
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 are their
children
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's
first
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 teachers and are
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children
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 are most in contact with. It is widely believed that
parents
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 are responsible for developing their child’s character.
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, research shows that
parents
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 have a strong influence on a child's personality development. Teaching
children
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 how to love themselves and others, and showing unconditional love to them, will foster kindness and compassion in
children
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 early on.
Such
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 a character will lay a good foundation for an individual to become a valuable member of
society
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.
On the other hand
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, schools provide
children
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 with a broader perspective on their
society
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. Once
children
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 enter school, they will interact with peers and teachers of different backgrounds from the wider community. It helps them develop empathy and understanding for people who are different from them. Through participation in school subjects and activities, they will
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 learn how to appreciate and reflect on the values that underpin the local
society
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, including harmony, freedom, equality, and justice. All these experiences should teach them how to respect and cooperate with each other, and how to contribute to the community.
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, learning to be a valuable member
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of
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 any
society
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 has never been about basic teaching and skills. It is a learning process that lasts a lifetime. I believe that every member of a
society
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 has a responsibility and a unique role to help the younger generation to be active and valuable members of that
society
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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