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Some people feel that fashion is like art and a significant part of society, while others feel that fashion is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The
fashion
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 industry today is an important component of
society
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 and
people
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’s lives. It is true that many
people
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 care little for clothes and scorn the importance that others attach to them;
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,
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 does not mean that the significance that
people
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 give to
fashion
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 is a waste of time and
money
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. When one considers that areas of the
world
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 suffer from poverty, disease and inadequate access to food and clean water, the emphasis attached to
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 by the developed
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 can seem out of proportion. Many
people
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 would contend that the resources put into developing and creating
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 would be more ethically spent on creating some level of equality in terms of the right to live a healthy and happy life.
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 point is hard to argue with.
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, it is
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 true that
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 in the developed
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 cannot be expected to send all their spending
money
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 to
people
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 in need and that wanting to look good is an unalterable human trait. The
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 industry contributes to
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society
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 much like most other industries. It provides jobs and income to millions of
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 around the
world
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 and the
money
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 that changes hands generates taxes that contribute to the fabric of
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. There is more to
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 than trying to look better than others and excessive luxury. The high level of
fashion
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 is indeed a kind of art form and, like other art forms, there will always be
people
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 who appreciate it, want to create it and want to spend
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 on it. It is part of the development of civilisation and
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 is not likely to change. I
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 feel that,
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 the gap between the rich and the poor sometimes makes it seem that
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 is a waste of time and
money
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 and
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unethical use of resources,
fashion
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 is an important part of today’s
society
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 and economic output.
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 leads me to believe that trying to strike a balance between selfish greed and a more altruistic way of living should be an individual choice

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • self-expression
  • cultural heritage
  • global economy
  • fast fashion
  • environmental harm
  • consumerism
  • innovation
  • trends
  • superficiality
  • cultural identity
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