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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age.Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays lots of
parents
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 about how their
children
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 will grow up in a good
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 and people who have
children
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 want to their
children
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 be well-behaved people.
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, a part of mothers and fathers approach a
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 which is a punishing because they think
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way
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 that an essential and logical method for
children
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's choices and distinguishing between right and wrong things.
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,some
parents
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 claim that too being too much disciplined can be affected negatively on
children
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's mental health,From my point of view,
punishment
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 has two valid and drawback properties on
children
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's psychology. One of the negative aspects of
punishment
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 is generating a lack of self-confidence.When
children
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 make a mistake in anything,their
parents
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 ought to warn them effectively for these faults because if
parents
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 give a warning in a punishing
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 ,their
children
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 can be impacted adversely due to punishments.Implementing too many rules might be caused being insecure
children
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 because
children
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 cannot do anything independently since they afraid of making any mistakes and being punished. Another severe side of
punishment
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 is the aspect of anxiety.If
children
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 do wrong,they know that they punished because of these errors
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children
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 will be punished by their
parents
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 because of making mistakes.
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 ,being anxious can generate extra negative emotions
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 as nervousness,irritability and
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 cowardice.
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,
children
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 may tell lies to their
parents
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 because they are afraid of being judged. To summarize, when all of these factors are taken into account
punishment
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 has serious effects on
children
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's mental health.
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,I believe that
punishment
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 is not a proper
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 to distinguish between good and bad things for
children
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.
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