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4.More and more people want to buy clothes, cars and other items with famous brands. What are the reasons? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

In recent years, more and more
people
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 have shown a strong preference for purchasing clothes, cars, and other products with famous brand names.
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 essay will discuss the main reasons for
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 trend and consider whether it is a positive or negative development. One reason why
people
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 are attracted to famous brands is that they are often seen as symbols of social status and success. Successful
people
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 tend to pursue decent and high-quality items, and luxury goods are precisely created for them. Another important factor is the psychological need to follow trends and gain a sense of belonging by owning the same products as others. Especially young
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, they are eager to buy the brands which are the most on-trend
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 items worn by celebrities.
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, many consumers believe that branded goods provide higher quality and better after-sales service compared to non-branded items.
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, the cashmere coats by Loro Piana feature specially
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 fabrics
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 these coats are not only extremely comfortable to wear but
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 exude an obvious sense of luxury at first glance. On the one hand, the growing demand for famous brands can bring some positive effects,
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 as stimulating economic growth and encouraging companies to maintain high standards.
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 trend
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 has negative consequences, because it may lead to materialism, financial pressure, and unhealthy social competition.
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, some young
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 even get into debt in order to buy luxury products simply to impress others. In conclusion, the desire for branded goods is driven by social, psychological, and practical reasons.
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 it may bring certain benefits, I believe the
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 impact is more negative, and
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 should try to adopt a more rational attitude towards consumption.

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task response
State your view clearly at the start and end with a clear line. Then add more reasons and a final view.
coherence
Use clear links between ideas. Start each para with a main idea and use simple link words like first, next, also, but, so.
language
Use short, plain words. Shorten long sentences. Fix spots like 'Especially young people, they are eager' to a simple sentence.
examples
Give more real examples to back your main points.
structure
Clear view and good start
content
Shows reasons and a view on the issue
example
Some good example of a brand item used
coherence
Uses some link words that help flow

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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