Around the world, many adults are working from home, and more children are beginning to study from home because technology has become cheaper and more accessible. Do you think this is a positive or negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should spend about 40 minutes on this task.

The world has become more mobilized and advanced with
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support
of
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computers, smartphones,
or
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tablets and
internet
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the internet
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. Many
people
recently prefer to stay at home and work remotely and so do the
students
, interacting with their teachers and classmates through
the
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hi-tech devices. I, personally, think that
this
is
a
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significant progress that technology brings to human beings due to the fact that
people
are approaching it easily and more economically for
following
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reasons.
Firstly
, nowadays the progression of technology can push employment and
education
go beyond the limit of distance.
People
can work from home or anywhere, so companies can recruit
people
from all over
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as long as they meet their requirements.
For example
,
an
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USA based company can employ workers from Vietnam or China where they can find better candidates with lower salary
payment
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.
Students
can
also
choose to learn at
school
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that is
suitable for them without worrying too much about
traveling
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too far.
By
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this
way, it supports the concept of learning without
border
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, and
students
can approach any
education
systems they like. Distance employment and
education
can help
people
save
their
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time and provide
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financial support to them and especially the companies. It is quite obvious that workers and
students
will save hours every day if they do not need to commute from home to their workplace or school and vice versa.
Besides
, companies are likely not to necessarily spend money on renting and paying water and electricity bills every month,
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which can be a huge amount. It can be argued that working and studying remotely may decrease
people
's social interaction, and face-to-face interaction is good
for
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some respects.
Nevertheless
, it is hard to deny the benefits of that development. In conclusion, being less expensive and easier to access, I think technology is creating great advantages for remote working and more likely to innovate new
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modes
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mode
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model
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of
education
,
that is
to say, distance learning in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remote work
  • telecommuting
  • work-life balance
  • environmental impact
  • socio-economic background
  • face-to-face interaction
  • interpersonal skills
  • productivity
  • reliable technology
  • quality of education
  • flexible schedule
  • cost savings
  • commuting
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