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Some people think that the true function of a university is to give students access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. Do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Currently, many
people
 get involved in the argument about whether the main role of
universities
 is to give
students
 access to information just for its own sake or whether it should be related to an employer. In my way of thinking, with the fast developments in the
job
 markets,
universities
 should try to uptade programmes of
studies
 to benefit employers.
First
 and foremost, In my point of view, If
students
 know that their course would help them persuade some employers, they could have more focus on their
studies
.
For example
, undergraduate
students
 in developed countries, in general, have better attention and are more curious about their
studies
, because they have high chances of employability, as their courses are well-designed for the business world.
Therefore
,
universities
 should try to make their curriculum highly related to the
job
 market.
Furthermore
,
universities
 that focus on the employability of their
students
, may have better ranking among other
students
. High-ranked
universities
 have more trust in academic spaces, and more Talented
people
 usually try to enrol in these colleges as they have the best employability
opportunities
. Talented
people
 can
further
 increase the fame and ranking of the university.
Third
, in my opinion, if
students
 engage in courses which suit a company's benefit, they would have better
job
opportunities
. Employers around the world usually search for
people
 who best meet their requirements, and graduates with a university background information always would have better chances to be chosen by them.
For example
, UKH
students
 in KRG, have the best
job
opportunities
, as they have great contact with different companies and their
job
 demands. To conclude, in my opinion,
universities
 should always deliver information that best related to the workspace, that's because their
students
 would be more attentive to their
studies
, they would have better ranking and their graduates would have better
job
opportunities
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