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Some people think that the true function of a university is to give students access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. Do you agree or disagree? Give reason for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Currently, many
people
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 get involved in the argument about whether the main role of
universities
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 is to give
students
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 access to information just for its own sake or whether it should be related to an employer. In my way of thinking, with the fast developments in the
job
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 markets,
universities
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 should try to uptade programmes of
studies
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 to benefit employers.
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 and foremost, In my point of view, If
students
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 know that their course would help them persuade some employers, they could have more focus on their
studies
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.
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, undergraduate
students
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 in developed countries, in general, have better attention and are more curious about their
studies
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, because they have high chances of employability, as their courses are well-designed for the business world.
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,
universities
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 should try to make their curriculum highly related to the
job
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 market.
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,
universities
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 that focus on the employability of their
students
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, may have better ranking among other
students
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. High-ranked
universities
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 have more trust in academic spaces, and more Talented
people
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 usually try to enrol in these colleges as they have the best employability
opportunities
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. Talented
people
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 can
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 increase the fame and ranking of the university.
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, in my opinion, if
students
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 engage in courses which suit a company's benefit, they would have better
job
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opportunities
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. Employers around the world usually search for
people
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 who best meet their requirements, and graduates with a university background information always would have better chances to be chosen by them.
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, UKH
students
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 in KRG, have the best
job
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opportunities
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, as they have great contact with different companies and their
job
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 demands. To conclude, in my opinion,
universities
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 should always deliver information that best related to the workspace, that's because their
students
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 would be more attentive to their
studies
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, they would have better ranking and their graduates would have better
job
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opportunities
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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