It is better if an extended family for example uncle aunt grandparents are involved in a child upbringing than just parent alone. To what extend do you agree or disagree?
These days,it is a debatable topic that a child's upbringing should happen under the supervision of a joint family where all the family members included
such
as an uncle,aunt and grandparents
rather with their parents
only.I agree with the people
who believe that a joint family has a brighter impact on a kid's growth.So, They can adapt to their own culture and good behaviour, as well as parents
,can concentrate on their work
easily.
Firstly
,the emotional bonding towards the entire family will be strong,it helps them to learn being respectful towards the elder people
,they develop good habits and also
grandparents
often tells stories about the culture of their family that way kid will have a knowledge background of his family at an early age.As he or she is surrounded by multiple people
they do not feel alone and it also
makes them avoid using electronic gadgets such
as tablets,mobile phones and watching TV.For instance
,the article that was published in "Times of India" mentioned that 85% of Indian kids are very respectful towards their elder pupils and also
they are kind.It is because most Indian children's upbringing will be in joint families.
Furthermore
,If both the parents
are working they do not have much time to spend with their children and they can not concentrate on the work
much as they are worried about their children being alone at home their efficiency at work
will be less comparatively.If they have a big family like an aunt,uncle and grandparents
to take care of the kid at home such
as bringing them from school, taking them to the garden to play telling them stories and feeding them.parents
can work
peacefully and efficiently.For example
, I was brought up in a joint family I have spent most of my childhood with my grandparents
and aunts,So, I am very much connected to them and I know the background of our culture. Whereas my cousin spent all her childhood in a city with her working parents
she has no idea what her family background is.
In conclusion, to have a well-behaved child it is important to have a joint family involved in their upbringing.So, they can stay connected and be respectful towards older people
and also
parents
can continue with their work
without any tension.Submitted by shobhareddymallela on
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
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