Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do agree or disagree?

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and less free
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more
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people
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some
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people
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forgot that
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health, they
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freetime
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the most important in
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they
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life.
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,
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that you can be yourself and do whatever you want like doing exercise to improve your health,
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to relax
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your
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things. You spend your
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is not
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meeting
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lazy, it's meaning that you'
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loving yourself.
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, if you are rich, have a perfect social status, nice outside looking, everyone proud of you but you must
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, you getting stress, nervous,
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depressed
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. Do you still happy with that? Or you'll
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worst because of social stress?
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rich,
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just want to use you and you like a puppet because they want your
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just pay attention
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money
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, your outside looking, how rich you are.
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but when
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you alone
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because
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soul is the most important, if you'
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loveing
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loving
yourself, training your health
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by
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, spend more
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freetime
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something
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, connecting to more
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people
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will love you because of "real" you.
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, in reality, most
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are working nervously to
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money
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but
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they
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forgot
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most important things. We have to change our lifestyle, working hard but
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • attire
  • fashion trends
  • individuality
  • first impressions
  • designer labels
  • social status
  • cultural appropriation
  • dress codes
  • traditional garments
  • sartorial choices
  • symbolism in clothing
  • cultural identity
  • expression of self
  • global fashion industry
  • cultural integration
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