Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do agree or disagree?
Someone said: "Having more
money
and less free time
is better than earning less money
and have
more Wrong verb form
having
freetime
". I completely disagree with that opinion. Social nowadays is modernizer and grow up Correct your spelling
free time
day
by day
, so that
Correct word choice
apply
people
have to harder in working and study
to Change the form of the verb
studying
earning
Wrong verb form
earn
money
. And because of social status, money
some time
people
forgot that they
health, they Correct pronoun usage
their
freetime
the most important in Correct your spelling
free time
Correct pronoun usage
their
they
life.
Correct your spelling
the
Firstly
, freetime
is the Correct your spelling
free time
time
that you can be yourself and do whatever you want like doing exercise to improve your health, spend
Wrong verb form
spending
time
to relax
, playing or Change the verb form
relaxing
do
your Wrong verb form
doing
favorite
things. You spend your Change the spelling
favourite
freetime
to Correct your spelling
free time
relax
is not Wrong verb form
relaxing
meating
that you'Correct your spelling
meeting
meaning
re
lazy, it's meaning that you're
loving yourself.
Secondly
, if you are rich, have a perfect social status, nice outside looking, everyone proud of you but you must working
24/24 hours Change the verb form
work
be working
everyday
, you getting stress, nervous, Replace the word
every day
despressed
because of earning Correct your spelling
depressed
money
. Do you still happy with that? Or you'll getting
worst because of social stress?
Change the verb form
get
be getting
Thirdly
when you're
rich, people
just want to use you and you like a puppet because they want your money
, they'
Change the verb form
they're just paying
re
just pay attention in
Change preposition
to
you
Change the pronoun
your
money
, your outside looking, how rich you are. butwhen
you aren't rich anymore, they will Correct your spelling
but when
left
you alone Change the verb form
leave
be left
cecause
you aren't useful.
Fourthly, the rest Correct your spelling
because
in
Change preposition
of
you
soul is the most important, if you'Correct pronoun usage
your
re
loveing
yourself, training your health Correct your spelling
loving
day
by day
, spend more freetime
to helping Correct your spelling
free time
people
, do
Wrong verb form
doing
somehing
you want, Correct your spelling
something
relax
, connecting to more Replace the word
relaxing
peoplem
do exercise together,... so that Correct your spelling
people
people
will love you because of "real" you.
Last
but not lease
, in reality, most Correct your spelling
least
people
are working nervously to earning
Wrong verb form
earn
money
but the
forgot Correct your spelling
they
they
most important things. We have to change our lifestyle, working hard but Correct your spelling
the
also
playing hard to
.Correct your spelling
too
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