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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and animals. Others say that there are more important environmental probles. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Some people say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of particular species of plants and
animals
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. Others say that there are more important environmental problems. In
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 paragraph, I will discuss both views and express my own opinion. On one hand, it is true that extensive loss of specific plants and
animals
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 is a crucial threat, and the decline of these will result in an imbalance
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 the ecosystem.
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, it is
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 evident that various kinds of plants and
animals
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 are
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the
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risk of extinction.
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, if the number of
carnivores
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animals
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 who are at the top of the pyramid reduces
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 the development of
herbivores
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 creatures like rabbits, and deer will be harmful to the fields as they will become
consume
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a
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 grass in the fields.
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, climate changes due to human activity is a great threat, the excursion of
pollution
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 and
greenhouse
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the greenhouse
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 effect has resulted in the melting of ice in the polar regions and a subsequent increase in the water level of the sea.
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, coastal areas of many cities are complaining about submerging in the sea.
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, birds and
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 living in urban cities are facing various health-related problems due to increasing
pollution
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, not only these creatures but the population living in these areas are facing serious illnesses like asthma and cancer. If the amount of
pollution
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 continued to increase at the same rate in the coming period
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 it will be harmful to the existence of human beings and other creatures. In conclusion, nature encroachment is indeed a problem that cannot be neglected but atmospheric
pollution
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 is a grave issue, as it is connected to the mere existence of people on the earth.
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