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Some people think the governments should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles in order to solve the environments problems. to what extent do you agree or disagree?

#people #governments #cost #fuel #cars #vehicles #environments
Undeniably, cars and
vehicles
 cause
environment
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the environment
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become
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 bad due to serious carbon
emission
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emissions
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. It is often claimed that
high
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the high
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 price of
fuel
 imposed by authorities is a solution
of
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to
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 environmental problems. I completely agree with
this
 statement, the reasons will be
looking
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 at in
this
 piece.
First
 and foremost, people may choose other methods to travel in order to avoid the high cost of
fuel
. According to Economics theory,
rising
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the rising
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price
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prices
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 will lead to
eliminate
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 in demand
of
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for
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the
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goods.
Therefore
, people may ride bikes or have a walk to their destination if they do not willing to bear
such
 costs. As far as I am concerned, it is highly effective to reduce
number
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 of cars. A few years ago, the United Kingdom Government announced that
high
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a high
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 tax on motor
vehicles
'
fuel
 would be imposed, there was a rapid surge in sales of bicycles in the following days. Another reason is higher
tax
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taxes
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 from
vehicles'
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vehicles
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 owners can be used by governments to maintain the
environment
.
For instance
, planting trees along the roads and cleaning the street can provide an ideal
environment
 for road users. Trees can
absord
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absorb
 the carbon dioxide emitted by
vehicles
 and release
oxigen
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oxygen
. It is no doubt to say that
the
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money can improve the
environment
 of
the
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society. You can find in the United Kingdom Government's annual report that the government spends a few
millions
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million
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 on
conservation
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the conservation
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 of
public
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the public
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environment
. In a
nut shell
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nutshell
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,
high
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the high
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 price of
fuel
 may change people's decision on travelling and ensure more
fund
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funds
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 for creating a better
environment
, I wholeheartedly agree that governments should contemplate
such
 measures.
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