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Advances in science and technology and other areas of society in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as postponing the day we die. There is no better time to be alive than now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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In the
last
 century, there are a lot of
progress
 in
technology
,
science
 and other parts of society.
This
 advancement has transformed our way of living to an extent of postponing the day we die. It is a better time to be alive now than in the past.
Progress
 in
science
 and
technology
 has been really helpful in making life easier for everyone.
One
 of these advancements in
science
 is the improvement of vaccines. Since the day vaccines were discovered, there was a lot of scientifical research and
development
 that led to the refinement of vaccines and the
development
 of more efficient ways of delivering them to the human body.
For instance
, smallpox has been eradicated worldwide for decades due to the
development
 of the smallpox vaccine. Another advancement in terms of
technology
 is the creation and
development
 of transportation.
Progress
 in
this
 sector resulted in people migrating from
one
 country to another.
This
 helps us to understand other cultures better as we are able to visit and live in other places that are different from each of our own home countries.
For example
, moving here to New Zealand enables me to have a wider perspective on how different people act based on their nationalities.
Lastly
, the creation and advancement of social media. Decades ago we were only relying on news that are already days old and communicating with a loved
one
 far from you is difficult as it has to be sent through the post and
this
 may take days or months, but with
this
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 we are able to connect to loved ones in a click of a button.
For example
, I am able to talk to my family almost every day using messenger. To conclude,
progress
 in different parts of the society,
science
 and
technology
 have played a part in improving
one
's way of life and I strongly agree that today's time is the time to be alive.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Life expectancy
  • Medical advancements
  • Innovations
  • Quality of life
  • Transportation
  • Agricultural developments
  • Food security
  • Educational reforms
  • Cybersecurity
  • Privacy concerns
  • Automation
  • Environmental concerns
  • Climate change
  • International cooperation
  • Developed and developing countries
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