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Schools should stop using books for teaching children. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Some
people
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 argue that, in recent years, the utilization of books had better be halted by schools in terms of educating pupils in today’s complex society. Personally, I completely disagree with
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 point of view for a range of reasons. It is no doubt true that it is utterly wrong for educational institutions to prevent the usage of books in view of the teaching process.
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 and foremost, it could be argued that stopping the use of books could possibly deprive pupils of becoming proficient in some basic skills, and it would appear that there are wide ranges of significant as well as irreplaceable abilities
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 as oratorical skills, smooth accent or public-speaking which allow
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 to express themselves in every stage of their life. Viewed from
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 angle, if the government are forced to come to a decision using online resources in schools, in
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 case, pupils are most likely to withhold from those dexterities in their future job
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 of great importance in their forthcoming career.
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, it has been shown that, from my personal experience, in my organization, the director of the department of public affairs has established differently designed small libraries on every floor of his private school in terms of honing children’s oratorical skills for their future career. Another important reason could be thought that stopping the utilization of educational supplies would probably beef up unemployment in printing industries, and it is evident that the overwhelming majority of
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 tend to engage in the printing process including typesetting, process photography, inking as well as using techniques on an industrial scale which enable them to save their budget within their family.
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 of
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, in case
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 are compelled to lead the use of technology, in
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 respect, they are on the verge of being insufficient under existing conditions.
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, in Prague researchers found evidence that the living conditions of
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 are much better in terms of its printing houses almost in every street. In conclusion, it is understandable that preventing the use of those educational suppliers in the light of schools could be acknowledged as a wrong phenomenon for several reasons mentioned above.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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