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Because most information about culture and history canbe found on the internet today, museums are not necessary. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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With the development of new technologies and the acceleration of the
internet
,nowadays, almost a large portion of data with regard to our values, customs as well as early living conditions of our ancestors are being found online on social media,
therefore
, several
museums
 in the country are good-for-nothing.nAs far as I am concerned, I am strongly in disagreement with
this
 view. On the one hand, it is widely accepted that the
internet
, as a new invention in the 20th century is an effective tool to inform
people
 of the latest news
such
 as global changes, weather forecasts, recent breakthroughs and things like that. What I mean by
this
,
people
 are capable of searching for any information they want to know whenever they have spare time and
besides
, they do not need to read books in order to acquire data about something.
However
,
this
 does not mean that the
museums
 are unnecessary
,
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 since we only read or watch photocopies of monuments, antique and ancient items on the
internet
 by ourselves which is not an original atmosphere like
museums
 possess .
On the other hand
, currently, there are some inappropriate content and fake contexts on the website. It is indubitable that the
internet
 can not explain generally and fully historical monuments and values.
Hence
, to go to
museums
 and ask staffs who know well about history to elaborate is the best way, since there are a number of data in
museums
 compared to the
internet
. Provide that
people
, especially schoolchildren attend national
museums
 which include facts, outfits, weapons and older books which indicate about our eternal culture and everlasting history, they are able to learn more and more knowledge about their early ancestors. To sum up,
museums
 play a crucial role in expanding the horizons and improving knowledge about
people
's homeland.
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