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Many people beleave that social networking sites such as facebook have a huge negative impact on indivisual and society. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #beleave #sites #facebook #impact #society
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 is the fundamental right of every human being to have
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 transparent narrative about conflicted matters; civic factions, in
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 regard, are bluntly exercising
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 right when
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 about the effect associated with social
media
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 networking
sites
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such
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facebook
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.While a major social segment is rationally convinced that it is appropriate to consider that constant usage of
such
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media
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sites
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 are
prevailing
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 source of negativity
today's
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 life,
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both in
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individual
indivisual
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 and
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societal
social
level
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. Without being biased,my narrative, hereby
affirm
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 that
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 is sage to
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exhibit
 support in
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 of
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 a worthy doctrine.
This
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 essay will highlight some compelling
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 which
are
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 facilitating me to maintain my opinion without being
influance
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influenced
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 by any external factor. Core consideration which surely validates my narrative is related to compromised relationships. To explain it
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, it's imperative to emphasize that we must consider the realistic side of the debate
instead
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 of just choosing the conventional track of the truth. It's been observed that people tend to avoid
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conversation
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 with their family and friends
instead
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 they
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prefer
 to enjoy virtual meetings and conversations over different social
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, a
facebook
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 user might have thousands of friends but not a single one in real life.
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, I mention that
relationalships
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relationships
 are compromised and have deleterious effects on our
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lives
life
lifes
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. Another element
that is
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 considerably consisting me to stay firm with my notion is
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related
 to the undue distraction. To put forward,
facebook
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 and
instagram
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 keep updating and
post
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 other exciting content almost every minute which
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result
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 inevitable distraction. As a matter of fact, youngsters are potential users of social
media
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sites
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 where
continious
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continuous
 virtual side tracks
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refrain them from their work and educational activities. conclusively, the debate which has been polarized and unending can't be
setteled
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settled
 easily by just arguing and focusing
one
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 side of the debate. needless to say, the
aformentioned
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aforementioned
 elements in favour of my opinion are subjectively valid,
unobjectional
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unobjectionable
 and reasonable to strengthen my opinion about the detrimental effects of social
media
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 networking
sites
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