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Band 7.5

Your friend invited you to his/her party, but you are unable to attend.Write a letter to your friend. In your letter •explain why you cannot come• give your reason for not contacting your friend sooner •suggest another time to meet

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Dear Jasmine, I hope you’re doing well and enjoying your job. First of all, congratulations on
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 special milestone! Wishing you a wonderful new beginning with your partner. I’m writing to sincerely apologize for not being able to attend your bachelor’s party. I know it will be an amazing celebration, and I truly wish I could be there to enjoy the special moments with you and our friends. Unfortunately, I have a series of important business meetings scheduled over the next few weeks, which makes it impossible for me to travel. You know how bad I am at time management, so I’ve been focusing all my energy on handling every little detail, leaving me with no flexibility in my schedule. I
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 want to apologize for not informing you sooner. There were two main reasons for the delay.
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my computer had been malfunctioning for the past few days, so I wasn’t able to send or receive emails. My brother
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 fixed it yesterday, which is why I’m writing to you now.
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, my mother was unwell and had to be hospitalized, so my attention was completely occupied. Thankfully, she is recovering well and is now staying with me in Toronto. That being said, why don’t you visit me during the winter break? It would be wonderful to spend time together, and I have a lot of exciting plans for the holidays. Plus, you’ll get to enjoy my mom’s homemade food—something I know you’ll love! Hope to see you soon, and have an amazing time at your party! Best wishes, Raman

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coherence and cohesion
Consider using clearer transitions between some ideas to enhance coherence further.
task achievement
Ensure that all aspects of the task are addressed without any minor details omitted for maximum impact.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a warm and friendly tone, which is appropriate for the context.
complete response
The explanation for not attending is detailed and personal, making it relatable and sincere.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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