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Many feel that going to the gym is the best way to stay fit. Others think there are more effective methods. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some
people
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 think that attending the
gym
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 is the only best way that they could think of to stay fit as compared to
people
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 who think that there are more effective methods to stay fit.
This
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 passage will cover both scenarios.
To begin
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 with, as the world is moving towards advancement there are various types of equipment which allow you to exercise and make your
body
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 fit and healthy.
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,
people
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 who prefer going to the
gym
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 get fit early or in less time
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 to
people
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 who do not prefer. While visiting the
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, you get a trainer, who will guide you the best from his knowledge of staying fit and you will be corrected while you perform your exercise by other
people
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 as well.
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, the types of equipment present in the gyms are very costly and not everyone can afford them.
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 to
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, there are machines for every
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 part and with the instructions on them, one can find it very easy to use.
On the other hand
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, there are
people
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 who find that there could be other possible ways to keep the
body
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 grooving.
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, to keep their
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 fit and healthy,
people
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 tend to join a dance class or perform sports activities
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 as swimming, badminton, and various thing. I feel the biggest disadvantage of
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 is, that it takes time in transforming your physique.
As a result
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,
people
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 give up in the middle of their process and lose their determination. In conclusion, my opinion is bend towards the
people
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 who prefer
gym
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 as they get a variety of machine to perform the workout and yes a trainer is like an icing on the cake.
People
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 who are determined that they are better off
gym
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 are good to go.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical well-being
  • prime option
  • structured exercise routines
  • professional equipment
  • fostering an environment
  • motivation and discipline
  • counter-argument
  • outdoor activities
  • home workouts
  • cost-effectiveness
  • social and emotional satisfaction
  • team sports
  • hybrid approach
  • holistic approach
  • comprehensive benefits
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