Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

With the modernization in the world and advancement in
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technologies
, a lot of things
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changed.
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such
example is
relationship
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a relationship
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that
people
are having with each other.
This
essay will cover the positive and negative
impact
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of the development and a conclusion
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.
To begin
, with the advancement in
the
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technologies
,
people
are drawing
their
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most of
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time
in
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the
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social platforms.
Furthermore
, they use it to interact with other
people
,
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updates on one's
life
, and
many
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more things.
For instance
, earlier
people
used to visit each other and communicate face-to-face which itself is a positive factor, but nowadays they interact over social platforms, which affects the relationship
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another person, irrespective of a partner or family.
Additionally
,
people
are creating a gap
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their close ones by using the
technologies
more
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that
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than
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what they require.
As a result
, at one point at a time they tend to lose. Whereas,
on the other hand
, the better the
technology
, the more
people
feel connected to one another. For an instance,
people
who are willing to work on their
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relation
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,
technology
if
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the only hope for them.
In addition
, as they cannot see each other face-to-face they use video calling apps just to make sure they are around them.
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leads to
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of
technologies
in our day-to-day
life
.
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positive impact the
technology
has made
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people
life
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although
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they are connected. In
conlusion
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conclusion
, the positive impact of the
technology
in
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today's
todays
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world overcomes the negative side of it. Exessive usage of anything is harmful, but with the correct
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it will lead to a healthy
life
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology
  • interact
  • relationships
  • connectivity
  • communication
  • online
  • face-to-face
  • friendships
  • romantic relationships
  • family dynamics
  • positive
  • negative
  • development
  • effects
  • formation
  • ease
  • impacts
  • communities
  • connect
  • interaction
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