Many people argue that eating junk food has led to an unhealthy lifestyle. This problem has become more common among young people these days. Do you agree or disagree that junk food is the cause of the issue?
Currently, fast
food
and beverage are the most popular food
which is a
main reason discussed by Change the article
the
people
due to it
effect Change the pronoun
its
to
mental and physical health among Change preposition
on
adult
. Fix the agreement mistake
adults
This
essay is
totally Unnecessary verb
apply
agree
with the statement that eating more fast Correct subject-verb agreement
agrees
food
is the most common issue to
young Change preposition
for
people
health. I Change noun form
people's
Correct your spelling
believe
belive
that eating too much Correct your spelling
believe
of
fast Change preposition
apply
food
creates the
many Correct article usage
apply
kind
of Change to a plural noun
kinds
deasease
and low Correct your spelling
disease
diseases
brain
development.
First
, fast food
contain
Change the verb form
contains
high
level of Add an article
a high
carlories
and sugar rate Correct your spelling
calories
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
Wrong verb form
resulting
resulted
obesity and high blood sugar. Add the preposition
inresulted
fromresulted
People
argue that is
it more
easier for them to eat and no need to spend more time Change the word
apply
for
cooking. Change preposition
apply
For example
, my friend like eating burgar
and fly chicken after work. He rarely Correct your spelling
burglar
burgers
burger
eat
vegetable and Change the verb form
eats
do
Change the verb form
does
exercice
. After 3 months of her habit, her weight Correct your spelling
exercise
increase
over and Wrong verb form
increased
over
Correct your spelling
overtime
time
period. She become over fat and the doctor Add an article
a time
the time
recommend
Change the verb form
recommends
her
Correct pronoun usage
she
to
stop eating it and try to do more exercise.
Fix the infinitive
apply
Secondly
, fast food
decrease
the development of the Change the verb form
decreases
brain
. During their time in school, they might need healthy food
to eat like vegetable
, fruit, fish, Fix the agreement mistake
vegetables
meat
which are very helpful for their Correct word choice
and meat
brain
. In contrast
, they prefer more
unhealthy Correct quantifier usage
apply
food
more
than healthy Correct quantifier usage
apply
food
. Whenever they eat more of
Change preposition
apply
unheathy
Correct your spelling
unhealthy
healthy
food
, their brain
can not improve well. Then
it is effect
Replace the word
effective
to
Change preposition
apply
other part
of their body in the future.
In conclusion, there are many Change the wording
another part
other parts
type
of Change to a plural noun
types
unheathy
foods which Correct your spelling
unhealthy
healthy
are provide
Change the verb form
provide
the
bad impact Correct article usage
a
to
the younger Change preposition
on
people
in horrible of
Change preposition
apply
illness
and physical body Fix the agreement mistake
illnesses
develoment
. Correct your spelling
development
Correct your spelling
I
In
think that parents should Correct your spelling
I
guiden
their children not to drink or eat more bad Correct your spelling
guide
food
and better to prepare and pack healthy food
for them.Submitted by sedfrtgt on
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