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You visited post office for sending a packet. There was a long queue and you had to wait long for your turn, Write a letter to Post Master for the same. In your letter, • describe what happened • express your suggestions • say what expectations you have from the postmaster

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Dear
Post
 Mater, I am writing
this
 letter to complain about
post
 service. On 1 July 2024, I visited your
post
 office to courier some documents by speed
post
. The courier service was utterly disappointed. My speed
post
 invoice number was MY238741. I saw that there were four counters at the
post
 office but only one counter was operational. There was a long line for posting documents. There were old people who were standing in line for 1 hour as well and I had to stand in line for a long time. I could see that all the officers were busy gossiping with each other. I want you to take some strict action against those officers and kindly start all counters to reduce the time of all customers. At the same time, I suggest that the
post
 office must work with all its efficiency and manpower utilization. I hope to hear from you and my email ID was [email protected]. Yours Faithfully, Ronica Smith.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve clarity.
task achievement
Include more details or constructive suggestions to enhance task response.
coherence cohesion
The letter has a clear structure with an appropriate greeting and closing.
task achievement
The tone is suitable for a formal complaint letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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