Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Watching television is bad for children. Use specific details and examples to support your answer.

Nowadays
children
prefer to watch
television
over anything,
this
has led to various negative impacts on them
such
as
,
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hurting their eyes, lack of concentration towards studies and various other things.
This
essay will provide
a relevant information
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about watching
television
and
conclusion
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thereafter
.
To begin
with, I completely agree with the fact that watching
television
is bad for
children
. For an instance, watching several hours a day could lead to a blurry vision as harmful rays are being released from the
television
.
Furthermore
, continuous watching could affect the concentration
towards
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studies. As they tend to incline more towards watching rather than studying or playing outside.
Children
should watch
television
just to distract themselves for a while, they are allowed to watch but they should not make
this
a habit.
On the other hand
,
television
is useful for
children
who are more into current affairs,
latest
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technologies, and discoveries.
Furthermore
, nowadays
television
have
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been replaced by various other gadgets that
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children
childrens
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children
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are addicted to,
such
as mobile, laptops, and tabs rather than playing outside.
As a result
, they are seen more at home and leading towards
a
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unhealthy lifestyle, due to which obesity and laziness
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part of their life. In conclusion,
although
children
should be allowed to watch
television
for some time weekly and more time for education and playgrounds.
This
would develop a pave and lead to a healthy and sustainable life.
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