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Educaiton should be accessible to people of all economic backgrounds. All levels of educaiton, from primary school to tertiary education, should be free. To what extent do you agree with this opinion?

#educaiton #people #backgrounds #levels #school #education
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It is widely accepted that
education
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 should be a right, not an advantage. Some
people
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 advocate that receiving
education
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 ought to be accessible for any individuals from elementary
school
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 to
university
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. I broadly agree with
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 view. It seems to me that free
education
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 is a must for everybody in primary
school
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 and high
school
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, not in higher
education
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. A good reason to abolish
education
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fees
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 until
university
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 is that it gives
people
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 equal rights, whether they are poor or rich, and does not exclude a large proportion of society.
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 will result in increasing the number of educated
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 and reducing the number of illiterate
people
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, and the more educated
people
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, the better.
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, it will greatly benefit both individuals and society. Another point to consider is that it is not necessary for students to work at the same time as studying to cover their costs. It leads to spending more time on expanding their knowledge in their academic career.
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, if everybody, without considering their financial status, has to allocate money to
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, many of them will work a part-time job after
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, and they do not have enough time and energy to revise their notes or write their assignment.
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, I think having free
university
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education
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 for everyone would put a tremendous financial strain on a country because the universities would have no income from
fees
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.
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 to say; they would rely completely on the state for funding. Doing
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 means taking funds from much-needed areas
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 as healthcare systems. In conclusion, putting an end to
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fees
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 is feasible and necessary during
school
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.
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, a country should not offer free tertiary
education
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 for everyone. The cost of free
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, except
university
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fees
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, will be recouped many times over by the benefits it brings.
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