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Environmental problems are caused by technological development. Some people say that the solution to these problems is for everyone to lead a simpler way of life while others say that technology can solve these problems. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#development #people #life #technology
The
world
's environment in
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present
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are
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 damaged more than
the
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 past because of the development in
technology
industrial
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. There are some
people
think
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who think
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 that
technology
have
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 significant
develop
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 and some kind of
technology
 can cure the environment's
problems
,
in contrast
, some
people
 suggested
people
 should solve environmental
issues
with
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 an organic way. In the following paragraphs, the supportive reasons
of
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 each
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viewpoint
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view point
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 will be outlined in detail. The development
in
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 technological industries
play
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 important
roles
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 in the present society, but their footprints affected a lot
to
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world's
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 environment.
Then
, there are some
people
think
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who think
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 technologies in
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present
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 day can
significnt
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significantly
significant
 solve
the
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environmental
issues
.
However
, the
technology
 that can cure the environmental
problems
 still
produce
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the
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pollution in their production lines and can cause more damage to the
world
 which
is not cure
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 the
world
.
On the other hand
, many
people
 suggested organic ways to tackle the environmental
issues
such
 as growing more trees, increasing
animal's
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animal
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 habitats, and reducing
pollutions
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pollution
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.
Moreover
, environmental
issues
 which
is
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solving
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 with organic ways will not increase more pollution to the
world
 which
is not cause
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is not causing
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 more damage like using
technology
 to solve environmental
issues
. In conclusion, there are so many practical solutions to deal with environmental
problems
 in both technologies and
orgnic
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organic
 ways which
is have
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 different advantages and disadvantages. The
oraganizations
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organizations
 who have direct responsibilities
to
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 the
world
's environmental
issues
 should
counsult
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consult
 as soon as possible to announce the regulations that can tackle these
problems
down
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apply
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for better health of
people
 and the
world
.
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