Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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As the technology has advanced, the

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world

became smaller and smaller, and it has become a village due to the most high-tech transportation and communication. Because of that, countries have become similar to each other and people are able to purchase anything with

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ease from any place around the globe.

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matter opened tremendous

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employment as well as economics. In the past, it is so difficult to buy everything that we need due to the fact that transportation systems are not advanced enough to travel from one place to another in a matter of days.

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century, merchants used to carry salt with camels around the desserts for months and sold them

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high costs since expenditures of those are not cheap. But, in

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world, we can

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easily

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buy salt

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the lowest price

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anywhere as there are already cars ,trains and

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planes

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which can carry them in a matter of days. Nowadays, every city in every country has schools, hospitals, banks, parks,

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universities and etc

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are the most fundamental needs of

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human beings.

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, the most

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prestigious

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as Apple, Toyota and Samsung have established their branches

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throughout

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the world and manufactured their products. So, people can easily buy the same products of those

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without even caring

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extra cost of

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, people have more chances to work in

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different

kinds of companies as there are an increasing number of companies founded around the world.

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, countries can have conflicts

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each

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as they don't tend to like

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others copy their technique

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. To conclude, I pen down

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that

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phenomenon has many pros that can outweigh the cons and is a good thing that

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to humanity.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

globalization
diversity
homogenization
cultural assimilation
global connection
local businesses
economic impact
consumerism
standardization
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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

Maintaining public libraries is a waste of money since computer technology can replace their functions . Do you agree or disagree?

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Many university students want to learn about different subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others feel it is important to give all their time and attention to studying for their qualification. Discuss both views and give your opinion.