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In number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transportation.

Transportations
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 play an important part in our everyday life.
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 some
people
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 believe that a large amount of
money
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 should be spent on building railway lines for high-speed
trains
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 between cities, others think that it should be spent on developing the current public
transportations
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. Personally, I agree with the former opinion to a certain extent. On one hand, I believe that inter-cities fast
trains
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 are worthy of investment.
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 is because a
country
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's development is mostly measured by its technological advancements.
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, the more up-to-date version of
trains
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 a
country
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 has, the more modern it is.
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, these
trains
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 can benefit the
people
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 of the
country
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 by giving them a more convenient way to move between cities. If the
money
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 is spent on
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 project, it would help both the
country
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's image
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 and the community.
On the other hand
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, we should not neglect public transportation. Even though fast
transportations
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 are more modern, public ones are more important. To illustrate, the average person lives in the same city he works in,
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 he uses the bus to commute more than fast subways. Since
people
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 use them on a daily basis, a portion of the
money
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 should be dedicated to their improvement. In conclusion, some
money
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 should go to constructing railway lines and building fast
trains
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, because they are convenient and advanced,
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, public
transportations
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,
also
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, need attention, because they are the means by which
people
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 go to school and the workplace daily.

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