With deforestation, urban development and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered and some are even facing extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What can be done to deal with this problem?

One of the big deals for each society is protecting
animals
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livelihood and
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should make some restrictions roles for
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prevent
animals from extinction
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there
exists
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some true ways to tackle
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trauma which I will expand
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as
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below. These days, some species are becoming
indargere
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endangered
of extinction and
this
situation will affect
on
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other species and it had
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effect on
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others
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wildlife
for instance
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which
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already
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under research when one kind of animal
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extinct will have
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effect on wildlife habitat and if
this
trend goes on it obvious that people will be facing with
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dilemma which roughly
this
situation are not able to undo all bad effects. One of the practical
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for tackling with
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is promoting reforestation through social media and
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campaign
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against
this
pressing issue.
Furthermore
,
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feasible
solutions should be taken in order to stop illegal hunting and if
this
happened they have to pay heavy punishment. In conclusion, respect
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others
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lives
specially
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animals
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habitat
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will be
cousing
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causing
protect distraction the ecosystem and
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trend will affect on
quality
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of our lives.
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