Topic: Information technology enables many people to do their work outside their workplace (e.g. at home, when travelling, etc.). Do the benefits of this mobility outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays, a majority belong to
information
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the information
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technology
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field
. Information technology sectors have attractive offices
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, they start
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woking
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home
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during
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of Covid-19.
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is the only sector where workers are able to join their
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from anywhere while doing travel or from staying anywhere. In
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will discuss
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the pros
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and cons of
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work
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outside
their
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workplace. Information technology
consist
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programming
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of programming
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, working on
softwares
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software
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by using computers or laptop
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in contrast
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other segments
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as
food
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industry,
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and pharmaceuticals
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always required physical verification. There are
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a lot
of positives of doing
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job
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women
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who have
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infant and she is unable to join
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office
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to leave her child. In
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if she
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a
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option to continue her
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by
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home
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it is convenient to take care
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of her
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child while attending
office
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. Other benefits,
people
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able to do
their
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some other
work
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while doing
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job
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the job
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for example
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they are able to cook fresh food for
theirselves
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themselves
and have lunch or dinner with their love ones. During travelling or going
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anywhere
people
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who have
laptop
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so they can easily take their
office
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with
theirselves
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themselves
without taking off from
work
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.
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of conversation, some
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face real issues by having
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job
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because in
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feild
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field
people
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working more than 9 to 10 hours on computers or on
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.
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a great number of companies started giving
work
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from
home
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to their 95 % of
employess
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employees
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of COVID-19 and they are continuing their jobs till now because companies saved a large number of maintenance
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of
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employees,
they
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and they
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started a hybrid culture. In
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scenario
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fitness will
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. In conclusion, there are both pros and cons
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working in
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feild
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field
. A majority enjoy their
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by
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by
home
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or from anywhere by
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giving
time to their family. Mothers have
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opportunity to attend
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office
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by
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home
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. Some cons about
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activity which is compromised. All advantages outweigh the
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disadvantages
because a comfortable
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is more convenient
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the end for every employee.
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