People’s shopping habits depend more on the age group that they belong to than any other factors. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

These day
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, shopping is influenced
by
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for
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a wide variety of reasons.
People
's shopping
habits
depend on
the
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their
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age group
while
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apply
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,
however
, some
people
argue that it
based
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is based
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on other
factors
like financial status.
This
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essay, I will discuss
about
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my own opinion in
details
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detail
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.
The
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first
and foremost is that shopping
habits
mostly depend on financial status and
income
.
In other words
,
the
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apply
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rich
people
can spend more
money
on shopping rather than middle and lower class
income
people
Moreover
,
lower
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lower-income
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income
people
and family who can not afford on buying
different
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a different
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type
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types
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of things as they have to cover other expenses monthly. Another thing is,
this
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that this
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habit
based
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is based
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on their upbringing cultures. These
factors
influence each and every
individuals
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individual
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in unique ways. To elaborate
further
, the children who grew up in rich
family
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families
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will do frequently on shopping as they don't have to worry about
money
than
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like
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poor
people
. Among
sibilings
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siblings
, their tastes of like and dislike are different in individuals as they
are grow
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grow
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into adults.
Furthermore
, the youngster can spend a lot of
money
as compared to elderly
people
. Teenager
primarly
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primarily
spends on clothes, smartphones and cosmetic that are not
neccessary
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necessary
for them. They spend extra
money
on
this
type of shopping than elderly
people
.
Thus
,
shopping
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the shopping
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habits
of
people
depend on
the
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their
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individuals and unique ways. In conclusion, I reckon that
this
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these
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habits
can be considered as minor
factors
on age groups and it depends on their financial status,
income
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the income
an income
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of their upbringing environment are crucial
factors
which draw more attention.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • shopping habits
  • age group
  • generational differences
  • individual preferences
  • interests
  • socioeconomic factors
  • cultural influences
  • marketing strategies
  • advertising
  • online shopping
  • technology
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