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It is common nowadays for each member of family to have their own peace of modern technology. Some people think that this will lead to a break down in the family relationships and communication to what extent do you agree or disagree.

With the modernization in the world and advancement in the technologies, everyone owns a technological device to communicate with their relatives and
friends
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 who stays far away. Using excessive
technology
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 develops a conflict between the near and dear ones.
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 essay will cover both the views and a conclusion
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.
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,
to begin
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 with,
technology
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 is invented to make human life easier to communicate with their family
members
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 and
friends
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.
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,
technology
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 plays a vital role in providing leisure time from a busy schedule. If any of the
members
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 are staying in a different city or country,
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, it will be easy to communicate with them through the internet.
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, my brother stays in England, so my mother uses the internet to talk to him and check on him.
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, you are able to talk to the person who stays away from you and communicate with them,
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 builds the relationship stronger.
On the other hand
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,
people
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 believe that using
technology
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 for their own peace can sometimes lead to a gap between the family
members
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, and develop conflicts between them.
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,
people
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 tend to use
technology
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 a lot in their day-to-day life for various activities
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 as playing video games and browsing, and social media apps, due to which, relationships with family
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 and
friends
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 get ruined.
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, youngsters these days can only be seen at home rather than playing outside with
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,
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 leads to an unhealthy lifestyle.
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, there are a few children in my family who can always be seen with a gadget in their hands.
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, they won't talk to others which are eventually affecting the relationship. In conclusion, in my opinion, both views have some advantages and disadvantages, with the excessive use of
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people
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 are ruining their relationship with their family or
friends
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.
People
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 have to make sure they utilize their leisure time by playing physical games or physical chatting with their relatives.

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