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In some parts of the world, it is common that
students
 to have one year break when they graduate. Some of them who are from wealthy families would like to go to travel and some economically vulnerable
students
 would rather te work during the break and after that, they return to their education.
Although
 there are some drawbacks involved in
this
 matter, the tangible benefits occurring by it are by no means negligible. On the plus side, earning experiences is one of the contributing reasons which can be immensely influential. ,
Obviously
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 youngsters can learn many different things by travelling and working. Take
students
 working as junior experts in well-known firms as an example, they are able to acknowledge various information about plenty of businesses.
As a result
, they will be able to choose better majors on account of their knowledge and experience. Not only does working help them to earn experience, but
also
 it is a good way for them to be autonomous. They can earn money which helps them to cover their expenses and make them independent.
However
, on the downside, disadvantages cannot be ignored. It is evident that earning money for adolescents
also
 can (can
also
) act as a deterrent. They might find working an interesting part of their lives and don't like to return to education.
Therefore
 in some special cases, working cannot be always (always be) constructive and fruitful, and on top of that studying after a one-year break seems to be really hard because
students
 may have forgotten many lessons and they have to study harder than before to remember indispensable parts of their lessons. To wrap it all up, a one-year break can be both rewarding and problematic simultaneously. It completely depends on the personality and character of the
students
 to make (take) advantage of that or just waste their time.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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