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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subjects. To what extent do you apree or disapree?

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Both
men
 and
women
 should be accepted in different education
centers
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 with the same priority on various topics. I,
however
, totally agree with the given statement on the basis of some primary reasons which will be discussed in detail.
To begin
 with, diversity of vision is the
first
 contributing factor involved in
this
 matter. Obviously, females and males have two various points of view on the same subjects which in turn lead to more creative ideas and on top of that, the basic
right
 of both
men
 and
women
 to pursue their interests according to their ability is another prime cause which should be pointed out. If individuals have the
right
 to study in their favourite major just for their
gender
 (meaningless), they will be demotivated in their rest lifetime for the rest of their lives). Having said that, different visions and the basic
right
 are not the only items associated with
this
 topic, another compelling factor which should be noticed is the various natural aptitudes of different genders. It is evident that
women
 can outperform their male counterparts in some specific subjects. Take science as an example, the imagination power of females would allow them to discover unknown things better than
men
. Not only do they do their theoretical tasks better in
this
 field, but
also
, they can possess different results in their practical subjects too due largely to their physical differences. To wrap all it up, I believe that
although
 there are many differences between
men
 and
women
 on account of their
gender
. We should place a premium (on) both of them and it's their
first
right
 to be accepted in their favourite universities for their skills regardless of their
gender
 and it should be a big chance (for) them to follow their goals according to hard work and their
gender
 must not act as a deterrent along their way.
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