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Some people say that educational success depends most of the time on having a good teacher. Other say that attitude of students also matters? Discuss both views and give your opinion

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It is argued that
Teachers
 play an important role in the
student
's academic success, whilst others disagree and think it depends on a
student
's
attitude
 to be successful.
This
 essay will
first
 look at why
teachers
 are important academically and
then
 we will discuss how being focused and having the right
attitude
 is the way to be successful.
This
 essay will discuss both views. In the contemporary world, educational textbooks have lots of details, which makes it difficult for young
students
 to grasp the mentioned information and have a clear picture of the syllabus. An experienced teacher can be helpful to
students
 because they have the understanding and knowledge of the theories and essays in full detail.
For example
, the Math course at The University of Mumbai has around 70 sections . A
student
 who prepares on their own usually fails their classes.
However
, success is achieved by self-determination,constant hard work and the right
attitude
.
Students
 can only achieve their goals if they are focused on the career path, no
teachers
 can help a
student
 who is not serious with their education.For an instance, many
students
 are wasting their time by playing games, doing social medial activities and partying.
Teachers
 involved with
such
students
 can't educate them because the
students
 don't have the right
attitude
 towards their studies. In conclusion,
students
 should have the correct
attitude
, if they don't it will be difficult for them to achieve great things in their life.
Teachers
 can only guide the
students
 to academic success.
However
 it completely depends on the
student
, and how focussed and serious they are with their education.
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