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Some people think living in big cities is bad for people’s health. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, Many
cities
 are confronted with a
lot
 of problems due to overpopulation. Some
people
 think living in big
cities
 is bad for
people
’s health. In my opinion, I totally agree with
this
 sentence and I will explain my reason in the following paragraph.
Firstly
, living in
cities
 has lots of pollution.
For example
, Air pollution from a cloud of PM2.5 dust in Bangkok originated from various factors. Some researchers assume from cars on the street emit carbon dioxide and dust. old buses in Bangkok are still driving and servicing
people
 even if it's emitting a
lot
 of smoke. Another example, Noise pollution makes
people
 in
cities
 confront healths problem. If have a house or condominium on the main road. They will have a problem with louder sounds that make sleepless problems and will affect other health problems.
Secondly
, Gigantic
cities
 are overpopulation. Statistically, If the world has an epidemic
such
 as covid-19. Large
cities
 will risk being centres of epidemics and have a rate of infections than the countryside.
For example
, the Covid-19 in France was more infections than in Switzerland because France has a
lot
 of population than Switzerland and the downtown is crowded with
people
.
Thirdly
,
People
 in
cities
 are faced with stress more than in the countryside. City society has more competitive than the prefecture. It will make
people
 feel depressed easily. In conclusion, there are a
lot
 of reasons to support why
people
 in big
cities
 are faced with bad health.
Accordingly
, There can be more than three reasons existing I can explain in
this
 essay.
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