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Many people nowadays travel abroad for their university education. Why do people do this? Would you consider doing this yourself and why? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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The bar chart illustrates the total
number
 of people who came in millions to the three different countries from 2000-2005, namely MET
Museum
 in New York, Edo
Museum
 in Tokyo and National
Museum
 in China. Overall, the
visitors
of
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MET
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 and
National
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the National
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Museum
 was increasing, whereas the
number
 of residents who visited the Edo
Museum
 fluctuated each year. In detail, the top
number
 of
visitors
 in 2000 was the Edo
museum
; it was approximately 13.5
million
, and the lowest
number
 of
visitors
 was the National
Museum
 in China, around 7
million
visitors
; while for the MET
Museum
, it is between twice around 12
million
. In 2001,
visitors
 to the MET
Museum
 saw a dramatic decline from 12
million
 to 6
million
; but
in
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 2002 until 2005 was increased to 14
millions
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visitors
in
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2005. The trend was followed by the National
Museum
, it increased steadily during the four years to 2003, with 11
million
 people and was stable until 2004. In 2005, the
number
 began to rise sharply to almost 16
million
, making it the highest
number
 of
visitors
 compared to other museums.
In contrast
 with MET
Museum
 and National
Museum
, the
number
 of personnel to come, experience is up to down. After stable in 2002
around
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 13
million
, the graph fluctuated to around 6
million
 in 2003
,
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 and started to rise gradually
around
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 10
million
 people in 2005.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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