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Global environmental issues are the responsibility of rich nations not of poorer nations. Do you agree with this opinion?

#responsibility #nations
The serious
problem
that is
 happening in the world right now is the environmental
problem
. There is no
country
 in the world without environmental pollution. some people think that the
responsibility
 for environmental problems belongs to rich
countries
, but
from
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 my opinion, we all live on the same planet, so I think we should solve
this
problem
 altogether. So I disagree with
this
 statement. Rich
countries
 are responsible for
this
problem
is
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. There are many factories, factories have an impact on causing a huge amount of environmental pollution, as more things are developed to
use
 and as much as it has developed the amount of trash will increase. So rich
countries
 should take the lead in protecting the environment with that
much advanced
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 technology. The
responsibility
 of the poor
country
 is. Deforestation is serious in
the
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poor
countries
. They live by nature for want of money. They cut down the trees more and more. They do not have much money like the rich
countries
, so they need to
use
the
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nature to live,
then
 the forest is slowly being destroyed
of
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them. Of course, rich
countries
 have more power to help solve
this
problem
, but
that is
 not mean to say they do not have
responsible
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of
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this
problem
. They should
use
 it sparingly, not waste it because of greed. In conclusion, environmental problems mainly arise from human life,
therefore
, every
country
 is at the world to solve
this
problem
 by working together, we should help each other. The
responsibility
 is not only for rich
countries
 all
country
 and everyone
have
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responsibility
. They should
use
 it sparingly, not waste it because of greed.
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