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Universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#universities #numbers #students
I do not agree with
this
 notion that the number of enrolled males and females in every field is supposed to be equal. In my opinion, there is no difference between both genders to some extent, but there are some physical and sex-related differences between men and women, and
also
 sociological situations sometimes make a gender work or study in a field more than do the other one. In the following paragraphs, I am going to discuss my reasons comprehensively.
First
, I start with gender-related differences to clarify why I think that some fields are better for a special gender. Beyond the shadow of a doubt, men’s physical power and level of tolerance are more than females.
On the other hand
, women’s kindness and motherhood sensation are far more than men’s,
also
this
 matter is not always the case, but personally, I think the more the level of kindness and motherhood sensation is, the more the hardship of doing physical power demanding and harsh jobs will be.
Therefore
, it would be easier for a man to do harsh occupations
such
 as mining, and for a woman to do emotional and care demanding jobs like babysitting. Another reason for my beliefs is the societal situation. From the beginning of human history, what did stand for men to do hunting and women to stay home and look after children were their physical differences. Nowadays in spite of human progresses, and the introduction of the equality of the rights between both genders not only has the situation of females in the society not been changed remarkably but
also
 in some Muslim countries like Afghanistan, we can see a number of limitations for women,
for instance
, voting right, driving, going abroad freely, their clothing codes and so on.
Therefore
, I think that universities ought to see their abilities and facilities, and have the potency to predict their society’s capabilities and needs so that they can decide how many should be the number of genders will enter annually to universities in special fields.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • fostering innovation
  • educational experience
  • enforcing gender quotas
  • merit and potential
  • individual achievements
  • natural differences
  • gender equality
  • reducing gender stereotypes
  • balanced workforce
  • traditionally male-dominated or female-dominated fields
  • fluctuating applicant numbers
  • compromise on quality
  • diversity aspects
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