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In many countries it is now illegal to smoke in public places. It is only fair that people who wish to smoke should have to leave the building. Do you agree or disagree?

#countries #smoke #places #people
Smoking is harmful to one's health.
This
 is the
first
 quote we see on every cigarette box. Nowadays, smoking in public is considered a criminal offence.
As a result
, people are recommended to
smoke
 outside the building, which I entirely agree with and shall describe in
this
 essay. Smoking has a negative impact not just on the smoker's health, but
also
 on those around him. A pregnant employee in an office,
for example
,
may be
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 the most harmed as a passive smoker if her adjacent colleague continues to
smoke
 in an unsuitable manner. In the world, smoking is the major cause of lung cancer. Smokers would not be able to
smoke
 as much if they were allowed to
smoke
 in offices or residences if it was restricted to only non-public settings.
For example
, if an employee is required to leave the office building whenever he feels the urge to
smoke
, he will find it inconvenient and will reduce his smoking frequency.
On the other hand
, most smokers claim that the prohibition on smoking in public areas has a negative impact on their social lives. Many people like smoking at restaurants and pubs with their friends and are
therefore
 unable to do so any longer. Apart from that, individuals claim that it is an addiction
,
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 and that the prohibition is causing them considerable mental distress. Different smoking alternatives, like
as
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e-cigarettes, can be recommended to
such
 persons. In a word, I believe that smoking should be fully prohibited in public areas for the benefit of society, as well as a programme to assist smokers in overcoming their addiction.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • secondhand smoke
  • respiratory problems
  • cardiovascular disease
  • clean air
  • public health
  • hospital admissions
  • economic benefits
  • smoking cessation
  • cultural shift
  • healthcare costs
  • smoke-free laws
  • enforcement
  • designated smoking areas
  • compliance
  • social attitudes
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