In recent years, many small local shops have closed because customers travel to larger shopping centers or malls to do their shopping. In this a positive or negative development?

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These days, many people tend to shop in enormous shopping

malls

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or mega

malls

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. It is an advantage to progress. Because they could be buying everything which

need

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without going out to the shopping mall. But it has some disadvantages for local

stores

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. The main reason, for shopping in mega-

malls

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is that people could be buying everything that they need in them.

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, there are many varieties of clothes and equipment, so the adults could save their money and

time

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, in my city, there are some shopping centres and one of them is near my home. It has many

stores

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for buying and food curt for drinking and eating. When I wanted to go to parties or other ceremonies, I can buy everything which I need

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as clothes, shoes, scarves, or other stuff.

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, there is a big supermarket under it, So I can buy it daily from it. many times, I could compete in it and I do not waste my

time

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, many ordinary sellers who have a store nearby these places could not compete with mega

malls

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, after a while, their business was broken. Around our shopping mall, many supermarkets and some

stores

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result were broken.

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, the sellers do their best but in my ,town the number of unemployment is increasing.

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, some people say that shopping

malls

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and mega

malls

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are the best places for shopping or spending

time

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with friends, but we should support our local

stores

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because they need their job for a living. In conclusion, we should be buying from local's shops because they need their job and do not able to compete with enormous

malls

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. Sometimes, when we do not have more

time

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for shopping for clothes or other stuff, is better to go to shopping centres and complete stuff by colour and cost and

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buy them.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

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